My dear,though I know that it's your special day,
I am but a prisoner of reality.
An innumerable amount of words,if I must vainly say,
Could never permit me to be free.
Tugging so furiously on my heart,
To collapse into an embrace with you,
Is but,alas,an expiring dream on its part,
To be crushed by fate so cruel.
Truth to be told,who am I to blame?
I foolishly charged down THAT path,brushing you aside.
Because,because of reaching the Eden I hope to claim,
Only to be trapped away from the light.
But my other self,the poor thing,
Haunts now only in my memory.
No more the same joy it used to bring,
Only just torment echoing within me.
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Posted by MchectorII - May 2nd, 2013
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So soon? Haha, I was actually going to apologize since I took more than a day to do so LOL
And your poems are beautiful (: and thank you very much for your good wishes
There's no hurry,miss,you can take as much time as you want.Happy Bird Day(I did not spell that wrongly,it is celebrated in the United States on May fourth.)
(Continuation on the last comment i made)
Since most of times I enter daily this site to see if I have a comment from you. Of course I play and see videos.. but sometimes I enter at mornings, before going to classes, when I don't have time to play. But I do to reply to you comment xD (I'm stupid)
Don't say that,I think you are being thoughtful and I should be thanking you for taking your time to respond.
Heyyy (I'm bored and I just find a japanese emoticon list, so I'm testing them out)
Welcome to the bored side,let's see,what should we do first?How about nothing?
Waaah, it didn't show xD what a pitty *goes away in shame*
Never mind,your words help me imagine your look right now.Come back,how about some tea?
Yes please :c *comes back* haha, thanks for making me feel better
I have done more embarrassing things than that.By the way,it was five months ago,you made your first post,so happy Rachel's First Post Day.
Wow, really? 5 months already? :O I can't belive how times passes by that fast xD and thanks, to you too
Yup,I made that day up for you and could not really wait for a year to pass,so why not now?It was the next day that I made the first comment on your post and the first time we 'met',so to me,today is Rachel's Day.
Haha, happy day in that case, should I give you a gift?
Yes please,it makes me happy to read your replies,if you would not mind,that would be great.
Well, I actually don't know what to give you, so I will let you make a wish :)
I'll dedicate it to you,miss,that you and your family will always be healthy and happy.
That's very sweet :)... but not fair! You need something for you aswell
Ok,I wish it for the whole world then.
I'll conquer the world for you in that case xD
You're too kind,but your replies are good enough.
This is great!
Thank you very much!
This poem is fairly relatable and has some really powerful lines. "I am but a prisoner of reality", "An innumerable amount of words... / Could never permit me to be free", and the emphasis on a cruel fate -- great stuff here (though it carries a sadder tone).
To be honest,after you brought those parts up,I find it funny and quite unexpected that I was able to create those phrases.I guess I had a better balance between my emotions and creativity back then.And also,thanks for going through my poems,it means a lot!
Rrachel-chan
I love it, is so sad but beautiful <3
Oh, and in reply of your comment:
Well, it can be worse anyway (: but I'm sure that the treatment that they will do on me will work out. People say that the mind is one of our most powerful things, so If i tell myself all will go well, it will. And I'll go to check thw animation! Thank you n_n
MchectorII
Ah,it was you who reminded me to continue writing poems,so I should be thanking you for that and your review.I am sure that you'll get over your problems,just remember to keep a strong faith and that I'm keeping you in my prayers.I can't wait to see your work but remember that your health should comes first,so there is no hurry.
(Thanks also for replying so soon!)